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The Benefits of Regular Exercise
Thesis Statement: Regular exercise releases tension, improves appearance, and increases stamina.
Sentence Outline:
I. One benefit is the release of tension.
A. An overaccumulation of adrenaline produces tension.
B. Exercise or active participation in sports releases tension.
II. Another benefit is an improved appearance.
A. The figure becomes more firm and trim.
B. Clothes look better.
C. Skin may become clearer.
III. Still another benefit is increased stamina.
A. Better muscle tone and strength improve performance.
B. One may be better able to ward off illness.
Şimdi essayimize geçelim. Her paragrafın yanında yıldızlarla gösterilen bölümde o kısımda neler yazdığımıza dair yorumlar göreceksiniz.
The Benefits of Regular Exercise
The
Benefits of Regular Exercise
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Açıklamalar
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In recent years many people
have become increasingly aware of the need for physical fitness .*
Almost everywhere people turn, whether it is to a newsstand, television or
billboard , * advice for guarding and improving health bombards them.
Although much of this advice is commercially motivated by those eager to sell
vitamins, natural foods and reducing gimmicks ,* some of it,
especially that advocating a regular exercise program, merits serious
attention. Such a program, if it consists of at least thirty minutes
three times a week and if a person's physician approves it,*
provides numerous benefits. Regular exercise releases tension, improves
appearance, and increases stamina .*
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*Introduction
paragrafımıza physical fittnesa ait genel bir bilgi ile başladık. Genelde
essaya başlarken önce genel bir bilgi verip daha sonra kendi konunuza doğru
inerseniz daha hoş olur.
*Gördüğünüz gibi önceki cümleye göre, yazar daha spesifik bir konuya yoğunlaşmaya başlıyor. *Bu kısımda daha da konuya yoğunlaşarak okuyucuyu ikna edecek şeylere değiniyor. *Introduction paragrafın, konuya ait arkaplandaki bilgileri vermek,tanımlamaları yapmak ve konunun sınırlarını belirlemek için kullanıldığına dikkat edin. *Introduction paragrafın sonunda thesis statementı yerleştirerek konumuzun ana noktaları açık bir şekilde ortaya koyuyoruz. Ayrıca thesis statement, okuyucu body paragraflara geçmeden önce, essayin ana konusunun okuyucunun aklında yer edinmesini sağlar. |
The first of these benefits, the release of tension, is immediate .*
Tension builds in the body because of an overaccumulation of adrenaline
produced by stress, anxiety, or fear. * Doctors agree that performing
calisthenics or participating in an active sport such as tennis or volleyball
for thirty minutes releases tension. If a person swims, jogs or rides a
bicycle for half that time, he or she should sleep better at night and have a
better temperament the next day. In addition, after the release of tension,
petty irritations and frustrations should be less troubling. * For
example, an employee upset by the day's work and by traffic congestion may
rush home, argue with the family, and eat excessively. Taking about thirty
minutes to release frustrations through physical exercise could help him or
her to avoid this behavior. Planned physical exercise, therefore, can
eliminate, or at least control, tension.*
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*Essayin
bu bölümünde artık yazdığımız konu hakkında detaylara inmeye başlıyoruz ve
ilk tezimizi sunuyoruz.Sunduğumuz tezler okuyucuyu ikna edecek seviyede
olmalı.
*Bu
kısımlarda daha spesifik detaylara iniyoruz.
*Tezlerinizi
daha sağlam hal getirmek için çeşitli örnekler verebilirsiniz. For example
ile bu örneklere giriş yapabilirsiniz.
*Paragrafın bitiş cümlesi ise essayimizin konusunu ve sunduğumuz ilk tezi destekleyecek şekilde olmalı. |
An improved appearance, which is a second benefit of regular exercise, *
is not as immediately apparent *as a better
disposition .* Exercise takes perhaps a month or longer to
show its results in a trimmer, firmer figure. Improvement, however, will
come. A person who is ten pounds overweight, for instance, may be able during
this time to burn away most excess fat and to tighten muscles, thereby
reshaping the physique. Having improved muscle tone and even posture, he or
she will wear clothes more attractively and comfortably. Combined with a
sensible diet, an exercise program will also improve a person's skin tone.
This improved appearance will provide confidence and favorably impress
others.
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*Diğer
paragrafımıza kinci savunduğumuz tezle başlıyoruz ve essayimizin ana konusunu
tekrar belirtiroyuz.Bu sayede okuyucu essayimizin ana konusundan kopmamış
olur.
*Ana konumuzu güçlendirici detaylara ve örneklere inmeye devam ediyoruz. |
In addition to the self-confidence engendered by an improved appearance,
increased physical strength produces stamina.* A stronger, healthier
body is obviously more capable of working harder and , in fact, of
withstanding normal fatigue then a tense, weak one. A worker who exercises should
be able to complete a forty-hour week and still retain enough energy for
mowing the grass, painting the garage, or cleaning windows .*
Similarly, the student who goes to school, keeps house and perhaps works part
time should accomplish tasks efficiently. Equally important, this stamina
helps to ward off illnesses such as colds and influenza. Altogether, improved
endurance is one of the most important benefits of a regular exercise
program.
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*Önceki
tezimizi tekrar belirtiyoruz ve ona ek olarak diyerek yeni dayanağımızı
okuyucuya sunuyoruz.
*2 ve 3.
paragraflarda olduğu gibi buralarda da detaylar ve örnekler ana konumuzu
güçlendiricektir.
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Although easy solutions to the goals of losing weight and
achieving an attractive, energetic body saturate the media ,* actually
acquiring these benefits is not easy. The rewards, however, are fully worth
the effort of an established exercise program that makes a person feel
relaxed, look healthy, and have adequate strength for strenuous as well as
routine activities . *
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*Sonuç
paragrafımıza başlarken daha önceki paragraflarımızda yazdığımız detayları
bir cümle ile toparlıyoruz.
*Son bölümde ise okuyucuyu etkileyecek bir cümle ile kendi yorumunuzu ve genel bir değerlendirme yazabilirsiniz. |
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